Emotional Thesaurus

Inspiration comes to us in the weirdest of ways. It’s a matter of timing. How moments line up in front of each other that lead you to an aha moment. For writers, these are precious things.

I happened on an email from an elected official, and reluctantly clicked on his spiel about how he’ll vote in Washington–when up popped videos of people auditioning for The Voice and X Factor. Looking subconsciously for an escape, and attention deficit didn’t help–SQUIRREL! I clicked on the 34-year old nervous man belting out the song of his life and the 62-year old woman singing the wrong song for her voice, so Simon told her sing another one, dissolving everyone to tears, and me along with them.

Why did this bring me to tears? (She thought, sheepishly, wiping them away before anyone notices). Why can’t I do this with my novel?Garbage day woman

For months, I’ve been struggling rewriting my first novel. The story and plot seem straightforward, plot points are in the right places, character lineup, the protagonist, her minions, the villains, a romantic, spectacular setting–all seem solid. I passed the software edit reports with flying colors, aside from redundant words and too many pronouns.

I whined about being stuck in pronoun hell on a blog on the Writers Helping Writers site. Angela Ackerman was gracious enough to respond (thank you, Angela!) She advised I most likely needed to deepen my character’s inner dialogue and emotional, sensory points of view. Sounded easy enough.

So why was I procrastinating?

Angela referred me to an article, Deep Point of View, by Melissa James, where she discusses writing from that deep place in your heart for each of your characters. She says it doesn’t matter how innovative the plot may be, the story will not resonate, “without that punch, that kick — the true, rich, strong emotional punch that deep POV can provide. Deep emotion, or point of view, grabs us with hard-hitting emotional punch.”

This prevents boredom in the story. I think of books I bail on, what is it that makes me put them down: I can’t relate or connect with the people in the story. I figure it’s me until I compare notes with other readers who bail on the same books too! So maybe—it’s the writing.Comedy tragedy

Writing with deep emotion gives stories “fire, guts, and spirit” as Melissa says. As writers, we need to “to live our stories so deeply that emotion flows, like tears from Titanic.” It’s easier to write nonfiction, about stories we’ve experienced. Emotion returns as if it’s happening again. A story grabs readers when emotion is raw, unfiltered, uncensored–and true.

Writing fiction is different. Basing characters on real people and events helps, but it lacks “heart” without deep emotion. So how do I do that?

I listened to a talk about the importance of writing with empathy, and the raw emotion necessary to convey that to readers. I thought of my favorite books and movies, ones that resonate with me. I read them again to study why these stories grip me. It isn’t the plot or story line, it’s the people, how they feel and think, and how it changes them by the end.spongebob_jellyfishing_by_coconautical-d56hdg0

After analyzing why I cried when listening to people singing with raw emotion, I had an aha moment: Singers, actors, and writers—good ones—lead us to a deep, authentic emotional place within ourselves. As writers, we have a responsibility to readers, to write with uncensored, uninhibited, raw emotional truth—not to is a waste of a reader’s time. I know how annoyed I am when I put down a book and feel my time was wasted because the writer didn’t transport me, didn’t make me feel anything.

Recently I read my first draft novel chapters aloud to some willing listeners. “Um, it’s boring, it sounds like a newspaper article—it needs—less description? More dialogue? The dialogue is flat, something’s missing—“ were the responses. This was sobering, but valuable feedback.denali-embarrassed-girl

Something’s missing, all right. So it took asking for help (again, thanks Angela!) reading more about it, and watching the X Factor and The Voice for it to sink into my too-technical brain.

(I blame my technical influence on the government–not the Russians 🙂 For 35 years I wrote legal and technical docs for the feds. If I would have added deep emotion to a FOIA response or a GAO report, they would have had me committed).

So now I must begin again. Revise and rewrite with deep emotion. Keep rewriting until the characters and story jump off the page and readers can’t stop turning them—so the next time I read chapters aloud, I look up to see expectant faces and not bored ones. Armed with my Emotional Thesaurus, I’m ready to go!

Next time I click on a podcast of a boring elected official, who knows what other problems I can solve?

Like I said, inspiration comes to us in the weirdest of ways.

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